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  • Mood: Happy
  • Listening to: Serious Age (Break Blade's 1st ED) - Faylan
  • Reading: Comments on my FB page
  • Watching: My Computer, Television,
  • Playing: The Last Story (Wii)
  • Eating: No more KFC Chicken Wings plz *stuffed*
  • Drinking: Water
Hello Everyone!

Today, it's my seventeenth birthday and I'm celebrating it with joy... sort of xD.
Well, (correct me if my English is very bad) the past few weeks a group of men were remodelling our bathroom, so there was no time to organize a birthday party :( .... But don't worry, mother promised me that there'll come a birthday party soon, likely over a month or two.

Anyway, I have something to announce.
It's quite the same as always, but I'm REALLY WRITING a fantasy sci-fi novel.
The problem is, I need some beta-readers to read the chapters and give me constructive criticism (grammar, punctuation, originality, character development, story development,). I also, but I guess they're just beta reader, need someone to talk about the ideas I have.
For example: I have this 'great idea' of what the tragic flaws of the heroes are, but I don't know if it's a good choice unless someone can give me tips or tell me what she/he thinks.

The story is about two siblings, a brother and his twin sister. They live in a medieval-like version of Amsterdam and the morals are by today's standards very horrible and ignorant: homosexuality is wrong, women are less than men. However, the twins are one of the few people of their town that doesn't think that way. They see everybody, women and men as equal.
Their best friend gets accused of being homosexual and gets arrested and taken to a place from from the town. The parents of the twins decide to stand up for their children's best friend in court, but the twins haven't heard anything of or from them in days.
Eventually, after a heavy discussion/fight with the teacher about what's right, the twins (and their best female friend) set out to go to their best friend, looking for their parents and perhaps... saving their friend from being executed.
In the end, the twins and their friends are involved in the whole save-the-world-from-evil-and-destruction thing... adventure.
Mind you, the story sets place in a world where every sentient being is able to use magic. Mechas are included :).

For those who are interested in helping me, just send me a Note or comment on this page ;)!
Anyway... have a nice day/evening, everyone :)

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Jermaine
Artist | Hobbyist | Literature
Netherlands
Current Residence: Amsterdam
Favourite genre of music: Video Game and Japanese Language Music
Favourite photographer: Kylie Koopa (Mario & Luigi: Partners in Time)
Favourite style of art: Fan Fiction (in Comic, Manga and Write Style)
Operating System: Microsoft Windows XP
MP3 player of choice: Windows Media Player or Real Player
Shell of choice: ...???
Wallpaper of choice: Wallpapers of Video Games i like
Skin of choice: ...???
Favourite cartoon character: Anime Character: Ash Ketchum (Pokémon), Ichigo Kurosaki or Toshiro Hitsugaya (Bleach)
Personal Quote: "Fantasy is Awesome!", "Fan Fiction Rules", "Nintendo Rules!"
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:iconrichartsong-windave:
I'm glad to find another LaL fan ^^
It's an awesome game, but not many people know it.


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~Gusindor Mar 30, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Happy Birthday!
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~MegaHeroes16 Mar 31, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wait... is it April the 1st already then?

Anyway... Why, thank you ^^

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~Gusindor Mar 31, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome!
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~LizzyBat Mar 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Welcome to :icontls-theoutsider:! Always glad to see more fans! :happybounce:

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*Tsuki-SoraRuki Dec 17, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Welcome At :iconcreation-inspiration::happybounce:
share with us your work
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for the rest I wish you a great time at Creation-Inspiration
The crew also help you so if you have any questions
just note the group we will always help you
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*Miss-Dutch Dec 11, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
:iconthankuplz:

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Mood: Love =KiwiChameleon Nov 30, 2011   General Artist
Thank you so much for the fav! :glomp: It's very much appreciated!

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~MegaHeroes16 Dec 20, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
No problem ;) I'm a big Xenoblade fan myself. If you like Xenoblade Chronicles as well, you might like my most recent story and future stories as they feature Mecha, laser swords, the whole fighting for destiny, etcetera. So in other words: my stories are quite inspired by Xenoblade Chronicles :). It's a magnificent JRPG, isn't it :)

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My dream is to become a great writer. But to become one, I have to know if my work is good. Would you all like to see if TCoA is good? I need and embrace the critiques, please.

"I will never give up" - Mii :D
Nintendo Rules the F*ck*ng world - AVGN
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Dank je wel! :)
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Mood: Spidey Sense ~dfox20 Oct 11, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Thanks for the favs! =)

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Mood: Joy ~Leon-Murayami Oct 11, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
Thanks for the favs! :iconfav3dplz:

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~Scibie Sep 21, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for the :iconfav3dplz:

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*Liketheisland Aug 16, 2011  Student Filmographer
Heard you're an aspiring writer... Have you checked out *Mpoor's tutorials yet?

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~OurBlueRose Apr 8, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Please read the [link] as it is about the community story. Thank you. :heart:

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